my description of the hacker exercise

    

          I think the hacker exercises are very helpful for me to write correct and good sentences. On my opinion, good sentence is the basic foundation of a good essay. The first of all, we need to write correct sentences, correct sentence means that the sentence not only just needs correct words but also needs correct grammar. A sentence is made by subject, predicate and object. And there are active verbs and passive verbs. We need to realize what is the difference between these two kinds of verbs. A correct sentence can not state that this sentence is a perfect and interesting sentence. Usually we need to change the organization of the sentence to make it become more complex. If the whole essay is consisted by simple sentences, the reader will feel the essay is boring even though there has no fault for your sentences. The hacker exercises have different exercises for every specialized area. For instant, there is individual exercise for active and passive verbs, we can realize the difference between these two kinds of verbs by doing the exercise, just like the exercise 8. And there also has individual exercise to help you organize better sentence, just like exercise 14. If the sentence is dangling is important to show it the sentence is good. If the sentence is not dangling, the reader will be confusing about the meaning of the sentence you want to express, the exercise 12 tells me how to make my sentence more dangling. Through doing the hacker exercise, I know how to organize my sentence to make it more better.

Hacker Review of Clear Sentence

E-ex 8-1 Active vs. passive verbs

I understand the difference between active and passive verbs by doing these exercises.

E-ex 8-2 Active vs. be verbs

It is a good exercise to review these two kinds of verbs.

E-ex 8-3 Active verbs  (edit and compare)

Even though I think it is easy, it lets me understand how to use active verbs better.

E-ex 9-1 Parallelism

It lets me know how to organize better sentence.

E-ex 9-2 Parallelism

It lets me know how to organize better sentence.

E-ex 9-3 Parallelism  (edit and compare)

It lets me know how to organize better sentence.

E-ex 10-1 Needed words

It is useful for me to organize better sentence.

E-ex 10-2 Needed words  (edit and compare)

It is useful for me to organize better sentence.

E-ex 11-1 Mixed constructions  

Actually, I confused about mixed constructions before, after doing the exercise, I have a clear realization about this.

E-ex 11-2 Mixed constructions  (edit and compare)

Actually, I confused about mixed constructions before, after doing the exercise, I have a clear realization about this.

E-ex 12-1 Misplaced modifiers

It is helpful for me.

E-ex 12-2 Misplaced modifiers  (edit and compare)

It is helpful for me.

E-ex 12-3 Dangling modifiers

I know how to write better sentence..

E-ex 12-4 Dangling modifiers  (edit and compare)

I know how to write better sentence.

E-ex 13-1 Shifts: person and number

It is useful for me to understad how to use it.

E-ex 13-2 Shifts: tense

It is useful.

E-ex 13-3 Shifts

It is useful.

E-ex 13-4 Shifts  (edit and compare)

I understand it more clear than before.

E-ex 14-1 Choppy sentences

It lets me know how to write complicated sentence not just simple sentence.

E-ex 14-2 Choppy sentences  (edit and compare)

It lets me know how to wite complicated sentence not just simple sentence.

E-ex 14-3 Subordination    

I know how to write subordination sentence by doing this exercise

What makes a story good

1. Must capture the interest of the reader
2. Clear thesis
3. Smooth transitions
4. Good grammar
5. Clear points
6. Questions to hook the reader
7. Ends in some sort of summary
8. General theme/plot
9. Well-developed characters, yet not too many
10. Has structure
11. Voice is continuous throughout
12. All information is relevant
13. Could add pictures to make even more interesting
14. Dialogue does not overwhelm the story
15. Author should be an expert
16. “Feed” the reader

Dangling Modifiers

A dangling modifier is when the meaning of a sentence is left "dangling" to mean something else because something is left out.

Examples:

• Reaching the heart, a bypass was performed on the severely blocked arteries. 
• Reaching the heart, the surgeon performed a bypass on the severely blocked arteries. 
  • The second one is correct, because the person performing the action is named in the subject of the sentence so the opening phrase doesn't dangle.  

• Determined to learn to read, Wanda was delighted to discover that there was an adult literacy program in her apartment building.  
• Determined to learn to read, an adult literacy program in Wanda's apartment was just what she had been looking for. 
  • The first one is correct, because the subject of the sentence names the actor.

What did people say in topic " who am I"?

      The first day, teacher lets students to decribe themselves, he lets students write something about this topic. The students shows their own ideas about this topic, there are many different definitions about this. Most of students define it from their age, name and goal. In my opinion, i think it depends on an attitude. If you have a good expectation on yourself, you will control yourself all the time. And you will have more confidence.

list

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Stamp: it is made by stone. And it has a special statue on the top.

Wallet: it is a beautiful wallet with beautiful colors and pattern.

Boat: it is made by wood, and it is small.

Chestnut: There are three chestnuts, they are airdry, we can find that they have a long history.

Pottery Jar: it is small and it has a cover on the top.

Coin: it has special meaning, it states the culture of Singapore.

Blanket: it is handmade, and there is beautiful pattern on the blanket.

Wooden Head: a woman head, and it is made by wood.

Woman statue: a statue states a woman, the color of the man is black.

House: the house has a good environment, there are grasses and flowers in its courtyard.

Woman who is begging: a black woman who is begging, and there are something on her hand.

Ruler: a simple ruler for measuring size.
                                                              

story

                                                                     Story

            Allen is a girl who just graduated from university, her nationality is African, but she lives in Singapore all the time. She has a good living environment at Singapore, because the people who adopt her are rich, they have a beautiful house in Singapore, there has a well at the courtyard, and there also has some grass and flower, the owner for this house is a doctor, 20 years ago, the owner went to Africa to help the African, he saw Allen lied at a coner by herself, because the doctor does not have children, when he left Africa, he brought Allen back to Africa and as Allen his daughter. Even though Allen's life is so good, she still not happy. She knows the owners are not her real parents. She wants to go back to Africa to help the African. And she has another important thing, she wants to find her real parents. The doctor tells her when he saw her at Africa, she still was a baby, and there was a woman staue beside her, she thinks that maybe the woman is her real mother. The doctor can not stop her to go back to Africa, when Allen leaves Singapore, the doctor gives her some coins which he collects for long time. Allen puts those coins to her wallet, it is a wallet with retro and beautiful flowers, it is a gift for her 20 birthday from one of her Singapore friend. When she looks this wallet, she will not want to leave Singapore any more, but she really want to find her real parents. Finally, the day she must leave coming, she needs to take a boat first to go to another country, it is a simple boat, and it is made by wood. There have not too much people on boat, the doctor gives her a blanket which is weaved by his wife. Allen feels so moving. 

           The trip costs her three days to arrive Africa, the government stamps on her documents by using a special stamp. When she first feel this land, she feels Africa is so poor, and there lacks of water. The shortage of water is serious. On the way to hotel, she finds many people use pottery jar collect water from the tree or little gutter. When you walk on the road, you can see many people are begging, she walk near to a woman who is begging, she finds there are three chestnuts and a wooden head before her, Allen asks her "what are you doing", she tells Allen she is begging for rainy, and the wooden head is the rain god in her heart,  the chestnuts are offerings to the god. When she looks these poor people, she decides to help her. She writes a letter to her adopted parents for helping, she wants the doctor can tell her how to find the water. There are many children have no clothes to wear, she uses a ruler which is brought from Singapore by herself to help the children to make clothes.

           Even though Allen does not find her real parents yet, but she has helped African-- her fellow to get a better life. And she decides to stay at her homeland for all the time to help more people.